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The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:20 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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What else am I supposed to do on a Thursday evening, play a video game I actually enjoy?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:22 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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So the opening scene does this thing where the text fades in and then fades out

But there's also voice narration

And the text fading is not at all matched up to the voice over

Like, the text is most of the way down the screen, but the narrator is still on the first sentence

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:24 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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The text fading is done and it cuts to the title screen and the narrator is still reading

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:25 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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The first real line of the game and the narrator is still reading. I did not fast forward this at all.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:25 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I QUIT BACK TO THE STARTING SCREEN AND THE NARRATOR IS STILL GOING

I'm not much of a programmer, but jesus.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:27 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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In fact, if you do click through the fading text thing a bunch, you can get the game's logo to show up while the text is still there.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:29 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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Lessons that have not been learned between Major/Minor and this game:

1. How to paint an evocative image with words.
2. How to write physical action in any kind of non-awkward way.
3. How to employ the use of internal narration, or even what the point of first-person POV is.

This bodes well, considering this is the first fucking text box of the game.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:30 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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This whole thing could be condensed down into six words, max.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:30 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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"Cognition has found me"

Jesus.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:32 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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who are you talking to

It baffles me that the writer still doesn't understand that first-person POV =/= audience self-insert.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:33 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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You don't know where you are, you don't know who you are, you don't know what's happening around you, and you haven't even established that there are other people here with you until this sentence.

How do you read their take on this situation so quickly?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:35 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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This is what passes for wordplay in the writer's stunted brain.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:40 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I mean, I guess I understand what "grasping at straws" means in this sentence, but it's still a exceptional poor choice of metaphors.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:41 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I'm not even sure what this last sentence means.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:42 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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Well, at least this time the writer remembered to put this at the beginning of the game, rather than drag us through an entire chapter before pretending our identity mattered at all

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:44 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I'm just really confused by all this. This is somehow less cohesive than Major/Minor.

What reaction is this supposed to evoke from me?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:49 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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"Underneath a veil of fright"?

Are you fucking kidding me?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:50 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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If you are in the middle of a raging fire, you are not looking for freedom, you are looking for safety

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:52 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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The voice acting in this game is also pretty uninspired, but I guess that's to be expected from a project where there's no director to give live feedback to the actors

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:56 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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The flames encourage your urgency?

Just say they push you forward!

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:58 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I don't know what's more painful, incorrectly using cliches, or the word salad that comes about from desperately trying to avoid cliches.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:02 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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How far into this am I, because I'm already bored

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:02 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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No, they died because being on fire is very bad for your health.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:07 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I feel like none of those stated emotions actually match the attached line.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:07 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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Who the hell is "them" in this case

Just before this, "they" were the other people caught in the middle of the fire

Are you saying we shouldn't be fighting furries on fire?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:09 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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No, you're using them as cannon fodder or sacrifices

Pawns imply a greater scheme or plan because it kind of refers to a famously complex board game

Good lord, is it really that difficult to take two seconds to think about the words you're using

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:10 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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The voice acting for this line is almost completely flat

Really shelled out for the talent in this one, huh

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:12 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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No, your suspicion was that Valessa was protecting you

When you saw Ulric, you were scared

jesus this was like 20 sentences ago

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:14 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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I reiterate: This character is the self-insert.

Every time the narrator talks about themselves like they're a narrator talking about another character, it creates more distance between the character and the audience.

I feel like I could repeat this for a century and the lesson would never be learned.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Thu Jun 13, 2019 8:16 pm
by Fartlord Dunktronix
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Does inhaling smoke give you a headache? I don't know the answer to this question, but neither does the writer.

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 2:19 am
by Gloomy Rube
truly, this is true literature. truthfully true literature of truth.

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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 3:12 am
by Pocket
Fartlord Dunktronix wrote:
Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:52 pm
The voice acting in this game is also pretty uninspired, but I guess that's to be expected from a project where there's no director to give live feedback to the actors
Wait... does this turkey have full voice acting now too?

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 6:10 am
by Perrydotto
the player's character is not voiced but the other characters are, yeah

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 7:42 am
by Angel Beat
ah shit, here we go again

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 10:02 am
by The Ghost of Ember
i'm all for in medias res, but you kind of have to understand the situation to make a meaningful moral decision about it

Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam

Posted: Fri Jun 14, 2019 12:38 pm
by ToastGhost
I saw "The First Chapter of Winds of..." and thought this would be about George RR Martin's new book.

I was wrong. :deflated: