The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
What else am I supposed to do on a Thursday evening, play a video game I actually enjoy?
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
So the opening scene does this thing where the text fades in and then fades out
But there's also voice narration
And the text fading is not at all matched up to the voice over
Like, the text is most of the way down the screen, but the narrator is still on the first sentence
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
The text fading is done and it cuts to the title screen and the narrator is still reading
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
The first real line of the game and the narrator is still reading. I did not fast forward this at all.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I QUIT BACK TO THE STARTING SCREEN AND THE NARRATOR IS STILL GOING
I'm not much of a programmer, but jesus.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
In fact, if you do click through the fading text thing a bunch, you can get the game's logo to show up while the text is still there.
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
Lessons that have not been learned between Major/Minor and this game:
1. How to paint an evocative image with words.
2. How to write physical action in any kind of non-awkward way.
3. How to employ the use of internal narration, or even what the point of first-person POV is.
This bodes well, considering this is the first fucking text box of the game.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
This whole thing could be condensed down into six words, max.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
"Cognition has found me"
Jesus.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
who are you talking to
It baffles me that the writer still doesn't understand that first-person POV =/= audience self-insert.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
You don't know where you are, you don't know who you are, you don't know what's happening around you, and you haven't even established that there are other people here with you until this sentence.
How do you read their take on this situation so quickly?
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
This is what passes for wordplay in the writer's stunted brain.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I mean, I guess I understand what "grasping at straws" means in this sentence, but it's still a exceptional poor choice of metaphors.
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I'm not even sure what this last sentence means.
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Well, at least this time the writer remembered to put this at the beginning of the game, rather than drag us through an entire chapter before pretending our identity mattered at all
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I'm just really confused by all this. This is somehow less cohesive than Major/Minor.
What reaction is this supposed to evoke from me?
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
"Underneath a veil of fright"?
Are you fucking kidding me?
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
If you are in the middle of a raging fire, you are not looking for freedom, you are looking for safety
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
The voice acting in this game is also pretty uninspired, but I guess that's to be expected from a project where there's no director to give live feedback to the actors
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
The flames encourage your urgency?
Just say they push you forward!
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I don't know what's more painful, incorrectly using cliches, or the word salad that comes about from desperately trying to avoid cliches.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
How far into this am I, because I'm already bored
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
No, they died because being on fire is very bad for your health.
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Fartlord Dunktronix
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I feel like none of those stated emotions actually match the attached line.
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
Who the hell is "them" in this case
Just before this, "they" were the other people caught in the middle of the fire
Are you saying we shouldn't be fighting furries on fire?
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
No, you're using them as cannon fodder or sacrifices
Pawns imply a greater scheme or plan because it kind of refers to a famously complex board game
Good lord, is it really that difficult to take two seconds to think about the words you're using
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
The voice acting for this line is almost completely flat
Really shelled out for the talent in this one, huh
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
No, your suspicion was that Valessa was protecting you
When you saw Ulric, you were scared
jesus this was like 20 sentences ago
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I reiterate: This character is the self-insert.
Every time the narrator talks about themselves like they're a narrator talking about another character, it creates more distance between the character and the audience.
I feel like I could repeat this for a century and the lesson would never be learned.
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
Does inhaling smoke give you a headache? I don't know the answer to this question, but neither does the writer.
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truly, this is true literature. truthfully true literature of truth.
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
Wait... does this turkey have full voice acting now too?Fartlord Dunktronix wrote: ↑Thu Jun 13, 2019 7:52 pmThe voice acting in this game is also pretty uninspired, but I guess that's to be expected from a project where there's no director to give live feedback to the actors
Every jumbled pile of person has a thinking part that wonders what the part that isn't thinking isn't thinking of...
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
the player's character is not voiced but the other characters are, yeah
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ah shit, here we go again
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
i'm all for in medias res, but you kind of have to understand the situation to make a meaningful moral decision about it
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Re: The first chapter of Winds of Change is free on Steam
I saw "The First Chapter of Winds of..." and thought this would be about George RR Martin's new book.
I was wrong.
I was wrong.